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Scott MacLeod's avatar

Everybody’s a Critic

“‘Vitruvian Light Show’,” sniffed Edgar, reading the placard beneath the colorful gyroscopic work. “Yes, I thought it brought to mind Leonardo.”

Kent tried to join in. Waded into the deep end. “I love Leonardo. I’ll go to my grave insisting there was room for him AND Rose on that door!”

Justin Deming's avatar

Haha! I can see Edgar’s face, and he is not overly impressed with Kent’s response. That’s too funny. But hey…Kent isn’t wrong. 🤣

Sharron Bassano's avatar

WHAT HAS BEEN SEEN, CANNOT BE UNSEEN, fiction

I entered without knocking and found my mother dancing with Uncle Charles. Multi-colored lights pulsed from a strobe as The Dead were spinning on the turntable. In the air, the scent of patchouli. They were drinking tequila, and wearing nothing but love beads.

Joining them seemed out of the question.

Justin Deming's avatar

What a perfect title for your story, Sharron. I love how it clues in the reader before diving in. Eek! There is no unseeing that image, ha!

Scott MacLeod's avatar

lol. My eyes!

Cassandra Davis's avatar

Oh my...

Sharron Bassano's avatar

A little magic for the Geriatric Hippies who may be reading Along the Hudson.

Sue Cauhape's avatar

Wormhole

As her life force left her body, it plunged into a tunnel of excruciating brilliance. Terrifying turbulence sucked it toward shadows and wildfires, thrusting it around and through tight passages until it finally reached the terminus. It pulled herself together and she began to hear voices greeting her arrival home.

Justin Deming's avatar

This is stunning, Sue. What a way to describe the afterlife and the next step in her life’s journey. I loved every word!

Sue Cauhape's avatar

Thank you, Justin. The Afterlife has been a huge inspiration to me these days. The possibilities are endless ... so to speak.

Sharron Bassano's avatar

I had the same thought here, Sue, but just could not pull it off as quickly as you. Lovely, my friend.

Sue Cauhape's avatar

Still, I'd like to read whatever you wrote about this. Let's compare views of the Beyond. Now there's a prompt for the writing group.

Justin Deming's avatar

Ooh, I like that prompt idea! Let me see if John has any photographs that will pair nicely with “the beyond”.

Sharron Bassano's avatar

Hah! Maybe....

Kim Smyth's avatar

Vitruvius Not Met- Fiction

“I want to use the time machine to go back to Rome.”

The instant the words left his mouth, he found himself in a multi-colored vortex hurtling through a time tube of sorts.

When he came to, he realized quickly he was on a battlefield.

“I've got to get home!”

Justin Deming's avatar

Ahh, I love this, Kim! Time travel stories are so open-ended and such fun to read and write. Great stuff! Thanks for sharing.

Kim Smyth's avatar

Thank YOU, Justin for the prompt and the hosting this weekly writing “group”.

Cassandra Davis's avatar

The Blank Space

If all her memories were technicolor lines,

etched upon an old vinyl record that played the story of her life,

in colors muted or vibrant like the sights, smells, and sounds each memory evoked,

then there would always be that one spot where the record refused to play—

—couldn’t play.

Justin Deming's avatar

What a brilliant little tale (and analogy), Cassandra. And so very relatable! Thanks so much for sharing!

Cassandra Davis's avatar

Thanks for the prompt and the opportunity to share!

Sharron Bassano's avatar

Oh yes, exactly, Cassandra! That one maddening little hiccup...

Richbee's avatar

Eyes of Knewt(fiction)

Surfer Knewt knew wave vortexes, totally recalls the tubal tidal ligations that beckoned; illuminated neon-argon arced energy braced beams. Enticed, the surfboard sliced-diced into space cut between thunder claps; spasms last go round-up. Luckily, a gnarly umbilical cord rose to surface. He takes a deep breath. Scared.

Justin Deming's avatar

What a fun and clever take on the prompt, Richard! So well written.

Richbee's avatar

Thanks Justin. Just born. Surfing safari. Waves include swimming down the coast boogie board. Pelicans catch. Just happened.

Kathleen Hobbs's avatar

Disco nights

Back in the day, they say things were brighter and better.

Dancing late into the night. Bodies mingling, flying.

Disco balls, reflecting colors on faces lost.

Psychedelic music blasting

young eardrums.

Not a care in the world,

Just looking for the next high.

Until later in life

You’re reading lips.

Justin Deming's avatar

What an atmospheric piece, Kathleen! I love it. And the progression by the end is beautifully rendered. Thank you for sharing with us!

Kathleen Hobbs's avatar

Thank you, Justin. I wanted to have a little fun with it.

Kathleen Hobbs's avatar

Thanks, Scott. I have to look for more of these prompts because I really do enjoy them. The pictures really help.

Justin Deming's avatar

Kathleen, I save all of our previous prompts on the page titled “Fifties by the Fire” on my Substack. Here’s a link to the prompts if you want to check them out or bookmark it for later!

https://alongthehudson.substack.com/t/fifties-by-the-fire

Kathleen Hobbs's avatar

Thanks, Justin, I will check that out.

Bill Ferguson 🇨🇦's avatar

Towards Destiny (Fiction)

Josh swished his wand around.

“The light show is brilliant,” intoned the salesman happily. “A true Vitruvian Triad. Not many people can do that with such fine definition.”

Josh smiled as he said, ”I’ll take it. Not many can do this either.” He walked through the maelstrom towards his destiny.

Justin Deming's avatar

Thanks so much for sharing, Bill! I really enjoyed this. It’s intriguing and feels like the beginning of an epic journey for Josh. Fun stuff!

andrea tackach's avatar

I've always wondered how often palm readers lie or stretch the truth. I have never gone to one for that reason!! Great story, Justin. I like how you mention the smell of carnival foods. You can picture the boy leaving the colors and lights and scents behind to venture into a semi dark tent or enclosure of some kind to find out what the future holds for him.

Justin Deming's avatar

Right? And which ones have a true gift vs which ones are conning the masses. I’m happy you liked this one, Andrea. By the way, I emailed you back! 😊

andrea tackach's avatar

Thank you! I read it earlier. It sounds as though you're having a wonderful summer!! I'll get back to you soon.

Scott MacLeod's avatar

Love the foreboding

Mark Starlin's avatar

How scary to know your own future.

Justin Deming's avatar

All I know is that I’m happy I didn’t pursue palm reading/fortune telling as a career. 🤣 Thank you for reading, Mark!

James King's avatar

Intentional Camera Movement

Dripping sweat, the vivid nightmare had me as the protagonist in a psychedelic horror fiction movie. Earlier that evening when I processed the results of my ICM photo shoot, the realistic light show eye of a monster unsettled me. I must remember never to work into the small hours again.

Justin Deming's avatar

Ooh, this is excellent, James. Thank you for sharing!

Richbee's avatar

I will join with a probe into the dark tunnel tomorrow. Today went walkabot looking at Calif native plants . Give me a night to think of a story to tell.

Justin Deming's avatar

It sounds like time well spent, Richard. These fires burn indefinitely, so there’s never any rush! 😄

Sharron Bassano's avatar

Oooh, Justin! I am stung by the fortune teller exhaling her lies, erasing her evil.... It is better the boy doesn't know.

Justin Deming's avatar

It’s probably better he doesn’t know, right? Thanks so much for reading, my friend!