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Kim Smyth's avatar

I see a picture of Jesus offering redemption in this story, Justin. I don't know if that is where you were going, but I enjoyed it!

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Justin Deming's avatar

Kim, I love your perspective and take on the story. It could definitely be interpreted that way. I’m still not quite yet sure where it’s heading, but I have a feeling Salvador’s story isn’t finished. Time will tell!

Thank you so much for reading!

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K.C. Knouse's avatar

You are on a roll, Justin. Go a few more rounds with a serialization.

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Justin Deming's avatar

Thank you, K.C. I’m still thinking about it! I appreciate you reading.

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Kim Deming's avatar

Another great story!! So proud of you son!! So creative !!

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Justin Deming's avatar

Thanks, Mom! 💜

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andrea tackach's avatar

This one is intriguing, Justin. I wonder what lies ahead for Salvador... I feel as though he needs to do something good for someone else in order to find his second chance. You definitely need to take his story further!

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Justin Deming's avatar

Hi, Andrea! I’m kind of feeling the same way. I have an idea or two that would take the entire story in an opposite direction, but it might be a fun way to continue Sal’s story (and perhaps bring it to a close). Thank you so much for reading!

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Sharon Hudson's avatar

I think Sal is going somewhere interesting, Justin! Take him there, because he’s got a great start! Looking forward to your note, too!

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Justin Deming's avatar

Thanks so much for reading and for the encouraging words, Sharon. I’m hoping to send that Note in a few minutes!

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Sue Cauhape's avatar

Well, Justin, this is a good start to an intriguing serial. Go for it!

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Justin Deming's avatar

I might have to! Thanks for reading, Sue. 😀

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Sharron Bassano's avatar

Wow! What a story, Justin! That first paragraph could not be ignored. And this line, "The type of list you stayed on until someone crossed off your name with streaks of your own blood." You are such a fine writer. I am proud to know you.

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Justin Deming's avatar

Aww, thanks, Sharron. That made my day. Last night I wrote that opening paragraph…Salvador revealed the rest! I had fun writing this one and toying around with the genre.

Thank you for reading! 🙏

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Richbee's avatar

Looks like a Coors beer is on tap.

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Justin Deming's avatar

Hahaha! Without question. (Side note: I once visited Golden, CO. To my dismay, the Coors Brewery was closed.)

On second thought, I should have named my story “A Few More Rounds of Coors”. A missed opportunity! 🤣

Thank you for reading, Richard. 🍻

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Mark Starlin's avatar

I’d been riding that train, singing “I’m on my way to Golden…”

What does he have to lose?

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Justin Deming's avatar

You and me both, Mark! At this point it seems like he has nothing whatsoever to lose, so I imagine he’s going to hop on board, ha! Thanks for reading, my friend.

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