Why do you have to make me emotional on a Monday! A wonderful story, Justin, and it's awesome to see the use of stories to communicate struggles overcome. Really fantastic work!
Very powerful third paragraph, Justin. And I appreciate so much that their ending conversation was " man to man". Talk to a boy as if he were an adult with brains and he is likely to believe it, right? I have found that kids never rise to low expectations.
I love how the story condenses Mikey's life into such a short description. And, of course, the heartwarming ending. Would have loved a visual of the two men at the end to really evoke the emotions there! Moving story.
This is you demonstrating your gift for conveying so much story is so few words. Awesome. This inspired me to get to work on a story I've been brainstorming that tackles some difficult subject matter, but promises hope. Also something you're good at.
I really like this one, Justin. As always, your dialogue is realistic and true. I think my favorite part is the ending where you have the two characters talking in the "dimly lit auditorium". The reader can almost see a spotlight on both with the promise of a brighter world for Latrell now that he has shared his story with Mikey.
Great work Justin. I love the short, concise language. Especially in the first paragraph.
Why do you have to make me emotional on a Monday! A wonderful story, Justin, and it's awesome to see the use of stories to communicate struggles overcome. Really fantastic work!
Dialogue is your strength. Enjoyed this one!
You tackle hard things with such finesse, Justin! Another great, emotional story!
Very powerful third paragraph, Justin. And I appreciate so much that their ending conversation was " man to man". Talk to a boy as if he were an adult with brains and he is likely to believe it, right? I have found that kids never rise to low expectations.
That was really heartwarming. It just goes to show that sometimes bad choices can be turned around for the better. Nice work Justin.
Well done, young squire.
I love how the story condenses Mikey's life into such a short description. And, of course, the heartwarming ending. Would have loved a visual of the two men at the end to really evoke the emotions there! Moving story.
This is you demonstrating your gift for conveying so much story is so few words. Awesome. This inspired me to get to work on a story I've been brainstorming that tackles some difficult subject matter, but promises hope. Also something you're good at.
Great story. I agree with the folks who commented on your dialog skills. Thanks.
That title!
I really like this one, Justin. As always, your dialogue is realistic and true. I think my favorite part is the ending where you have the two characters talking in the "dimly lit auditorium". The reader can almost see a spotlight on both with the promise of a brighter world for Latrell now that he has shared his story with Mikey.