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Mar 22Liked by Justin Deming

STRANDED, prose poem

I remember, Mama, when I was five, you'd lay me down on the kitchen drainboard to wash my hair in the sink, a washrag over my eyes to keep out the soap.

Now you’ve gone, and I'm stranded here with a thousand small memories of how much I was loved.

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Beautiful story, Sharron! 💜

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Dealing with that now. Thank you for sharing your story.

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Mar 24Liked by Justin Deming

Give yourself lots of time. The more you loved, the longer you grieve.

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Beautiful 😍

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Oh! Thank you, Sunil.

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Sharron, this brought up memories for me. The washrag made them so clear. Thank you.

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Thanks, Dascha. Long time no "see". I hope you are well.

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Thanks, Sharron. I've been dealing with a lot of ongoing health issues. Haven't felt like even popping in to read for a very long time. Today I pushed myself and the first thing I saw was Justin's prompt. It's also the first time I've written in nearly a year. I'm so grateful for Fifties by the Fire. It felt good to write.

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Dascha, when I saw your name pop up it brought a smile to my face. Just getting caught up over here with comments from the past day or so, but I wanted to say hello before I made my through them!

Take care—hope you are doing okay. 🙏 Thank you so much for stopping by. 😊

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Thanks, Justin. I hope all is well with you and the family as well.

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Mar 22Liked by Justin Deming

Unpromised Dreams-Poem

after many nights

of you sharing

your dreams i

thought we could

brave the Dark,

Cold waters. but

when you couldn't

hear me over

the waves only

the Whispers. they

must have Told

You You Could

not make it

because when they

found you they

said you tried

to Fly.

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This is so powerful! It held me breathless. 💜

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I may have been too abstract with the prompt.

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The prompt is merely a vehicle to take your words and ideas wherever they’d like to go. No right or wrong here, my friend. I think it’s a well written (and layered) poem!

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At Sea, poem

Drift I must, as my main-sail

Broke in the storm,

And these arms are too tired to paddle.

I shake the last drops of water from my oil-skin,

Praying for deliverance

As days and nights meld.

Stupid being that I am;

Arrogance my undoing;

Thinking the sea was my friend.

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A gem of a poem, Caro!

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Wow! Excellent metaphor Caro.

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This is so evocative, Caro. Wonderful!

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Being Stranded, Creative Non-Fiction

The car quit in a desolate part of town. We put the hood up. A few cars came by. One guy pulled up behind our car. He blew his horn until he finally realized, there was no one in the car. He didn’t see us standing over on the sidewalk?!

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Tough day. But at least you got a great story out of it!

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Love it Matthew.

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Oops, ha! Great story, Matthew. Thanks so much for sharing.

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Stranded or Worse { Fiction }

Light me, Willie.

Remember when mom's boyfriend was supposed to take us to Cedar Point?

That hop over that ditch was better than the coasters we missed.

I'll light my own smoke.

Think I'm in shock.

It was a fun ride.

The axle’s probably destroyed.

Willie? Can you hear me?

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Oh man, you’ve gotta write a flash version of this one. Love the story, Jimmy.

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Working on tonight's story right now. It can be a really good one but I'm letting myself get distracted. 🤡

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Carry on, sir! 😄

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I agree with Justin. This is awesome... and expanding on it will be even better. Which gives me a crackpot idea for a book of 50s and stories spawned from them juxtaposed.

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Stasis--Poem

Ships are safest while in port.

There is protection from storms,

Access to all my needs.

Ships are safest while in port.

Going nowhere, seeing nothing,

Rigging decaying from nonuse.

I set sail long ago,

Destination uncertain.

I’ve weathered storms and

Becalmed seas.

But sailing will always be my life.

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Ahh, lovely stuff, RI. I love the progression in each stanza. The final stanza is perfection! 👏

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Excellent. An allegory for life!

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Mar 22Liked by Justin Deming

Providence malfunction ( fiction )

The elevator malfunctioned and she was late for her interview. The network was down. In the dim light the other passenger was feeling claustrophobic. She regained her composure and loosened his tie. The office receptionist led her to a room.The interviewer spotted his tie and she got the job!

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Haha! Well played on her part. Another fun one, Sunil—great stuff.

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Mar 23Liked by Justin Deming

The way I saw it, her pocketing of the tie was accidental and in the panic moment. Not realizing that this same person would turn out to be her interviewer. And he in turn found her response to the crisis very efficient. Hence the job was clinched. So providence in malfunction...

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Mar 22Liked by Justin Deming

ha ha ha. Watch out for these women - all's fair in love and war and job hunting...

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Well done! Providence provides.

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Democracy, Dystopian Fiction?

She was meant to sail a thousand seas, to carry us to lands of freedom and equality.

All of us. Not just the few, the wealthy. Not just rich white men.

She lies, broken, rotting, on desert sands. A cry in the dark, a whisper, a tear for freedom lost.

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Now this is a story that will stop anyone in their tracks. Powerful, Dascha. I can only hope better days are ahead for all of us.

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Thank you, Justin. Me too.

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Mar 23Liked by Justin Deming

Wow. She does lie broken. But undefeated.

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I think it's easy to read this as being only about the U.S., but really it's about the world. The sham of democracy in Russia, Belarus, Hungary. The assault on democratic countries, both physical and political. It's open warfare in the U S. right now, but insidious in my own home, Canada, where Pollievre isn't that far from Trump in deology. He just packages himself better.

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The Ship that Never Sailed, Memoir

ChoChoSan was a brisk 33-foot ketch. We polished her teak and brass, shared her decks and forward berth. The wind filling her sails weekends and holidays. But always fighting to windward, we let the relationship beneath her golden sails tarnish and rust. The marriage never really filled in the sail.

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Annie, this is such a heartbreaking piece. I love the metaphor used here and how much you were able to fit into fifty words. Stunning!

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Thank you so much. I’m so grateful for the wonderful feedback. That’s very encouraging.

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Also, Annie, I’m just connecting the dots—thanks for the very kind Goodreads review you left a couple of weeks ago! It made my day reading that. And thank you for your support of my book! 😊

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Oh, I love the imagery here.

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Thank you. The feedback is greatly appreciated.

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Stranded: poem, CNF

how could you just have died on me?

two days before project launch

so much for making millions

and changing the world

it needed the force of your personality

to push it to great success

or make it into what it could be

I am lost without your momentum forward

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Heart wrenching, Sharon, but beautifully executed.

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What a great take on this prompt, Deb! Stranded indeed!

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I’m stranded in a Holiday Inn Express, three hours down the highway from home, five more hours to go. What is keeping me here? Waffling… fear of what’s ahead… fear of what’s behind. The hope in Keurig coffee doesn’t even work. I gaze in the mirror at bleary, pleading eyes.

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I know the feeling all too well, Karen. I’m with Sharron—forward is the only option!

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I really appreciated the prompt, and the timing when it came was perfect. Writing the 50 words relieved the stress, and was cathartic 🤗

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Mar 23Liked by Justin Deming

That last line is brilliant, Karen. Go forward, girl. They are waiting for you.

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Mar 23Liked by Justin Deming

Aww you’re always so encouraging, Sharron! 🥰

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I can feel the despair, Karen!

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Splitsville, fiction

It wasn't the boat that caused the end but the end of us that caused the boat's end. "Neil Diamond" was optimistic and in retrospect telling. Relationships can't live on schmatlzy sugar, they need a "Wind Beneath My Wings". I had chosen a speed boat, maybe it was already destined.

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Love the opening line, DW. Powerful story!

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The speed boat is perfect. I picture the protagonist departing the relationship at speed.

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Mar 23·edited Mar 24Liked by Justin Deming

So many wonderful stories and poems here. Well done everyone! ❤️

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So many excellent stories and poems, Deb! I’m with you! 😊

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