Nice! That’s an interesting challenge to take on a different “dialect.” I don’t know that I’d have the courage to do that, or that I’d have the patience to keep tweaking it until I got it just perfect. And you retained that same sweet core that makes it what I’m coming to think of as a “Justin Deming” story. Well done.
Very nice post, thank you. This reminds me of experience I had in Germany. The first time it happened, I didn't know what to do. I was in Heidelberg as a student and had walked down the pedestrian zone away from the university. At the end, there are street car tracks. There are about 15 feet separating one side of the pedestrian zone from a main square. So I arrive and everyone is standing in an orderly way with a red person highlighted on the sign. I walked to the front and looked in both directions. There wasn't a street car to be found. Not even a bicycle. So I'm going to cross the street, right? Of course I am. Not so fast. I did so to a chorus of comments, as though I had someone violated one of Germany's strictest tenets -- no crossing the street when there is absolutely no danger it all. It taught me a lot about German culture. Thereafter, every time I reached a red person and there were no street cars, I crossed.
This feels like a perfect story, Justin. Green Light Gordon had the x-factor to be a deeply memorable literary character.
Your stories are always so different and entertaining!
What a good story, and so interesting that it is told from Gordon's perspective. I love how he treasures his simple interactions with the people who come into his small life, and how that one moment where someone reaches out to help him saves him from a meltdown and at the same time reaffirms his feeling that people are good at the core. Wise thoughts from someone not thought of as so wise. We can all learn something from each other. You should definitely put Gordon in a bigger story one day!!
Green Light Gordon is my new favorite character. He sure does miss his Pa. His Pa still guides him even though he is gone. Thank you for bringing old dirty-pants Tim to the rescue. "And I say oh, nothing new. Cause nothin ever is. But I’m not so sure that’s a bad thing." I would love to hear another episode about him.
Nicely done Justin. You conveyed Gordon's mental challenges without backstory and brought in an inspirational "regular guy" at the end. I really enjoyed it.