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Oh yeah, I like this. I want more, and that’s the thing isn’t it? I wonder about that last sentence though ... would the story be just as good without it? I felt like you had dangled some intrigue in front of me already, so the little teaser felt a bit heavy.

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Great to see there is more to this story! Loved it earlier on this year.

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I agree with with Tom. The last sentence felt a bit like a spoiler. The previous one was enough cliff-hanger for me. Off to a good start.

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Looking forward to reading more!

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An excellent follow-up, Justin. Natural dialog. Fine description of the setting. An edge of something scary coming? You got all of us on board with that last sentence!

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Nov 13, 2023Liked by Justin Deming

I love how the guys are portrayed as normal, carefree high school Seniors with the usual worries and foibles, just out to have some fun, and then with the last sentence, the reader realizes that maybe this is not going to be a story about an innocent adventure after all, but something darker instead. I'm happy that you went back to this one, Justin.

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Amazing, Justin! So happy to hear you're answering the call on this story. I enjoyed reading it so much last winter and if you recall I was left with many QUESTIONS!!!! Looking forward to seeing where the story goes. If you ever want to talk NOVEL shop, let me know. I'm embarking on another one and feeling considerably more tentative this time around.

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