Well done! I loved how you developed the character as he climbed the fire tower. I definitely wasn't expecting what happened but was glad it did! Also, what he ended up writing with the sharpie was perfect.
Reminds me of the verses in Ephesians "For we wrestle not against flesh and blood, but against principalities, against powers, against the rulers of the darkness of this world, against spiritual wickedness in high places."
That’s a fine piece of writing, Justin. From sad inevitability, through dark vision, to redemption. The view of ‘the other side’ was especially well done though the details of the walk to the tower spoke of knowledge. Very believable and a great way to lead into the dark imaginings. Strong writing.
Excellent story all around. You get so locked up in the man and his climb, that when the action kicks in, you're caught off guard. Sort of corresponds to the image I had in my youth as to what happened to Suicides: they were sent to Hell!
I love this: "David walks gingerly down to the next platform. Pulls out his Sharpie and uncaps it. Writes MISSING STEP —> on the handrail in bold letters." Giving new purpose to the Sharpie at the end was brilliant.
Best of luck with your Lunar submission! Fingers crossed for you.
Fantastic story and writing. And reminder that ghouls and ghosts aren’t limited to spooky season. They haunt us when we’re most vulnerable.
A sobering vision, for sure. Well-done, as usual. 🤓
Justin, this is a great, tense, story with an all-too-real understanding of the context, which I once experienced. Very nicely done. Thank you.
Well done! I loved how you developed the character as he climbed the fire tower. I definitely wasn't expecting what happened but was glad it did! Also, what he ended up writing with the sharpie was perfect.
I literally jumped in my seat when he hit the missing step...not what I was expecting at all from this story! Well done, and it’s a well-deserved win!
A great read, the pacing was beautiful.
Reminds me of the verses in Ephesians "For we wrestle not against flesh and blood, but against principalities, against powers, against the rulers of the darkness of this world, against spiritual wickedness in high places."
Hooray, Justin, for the Lunar Award! A win well-deserved, my friend!
A glimpse into hell huh? But only a glimpse. Congratulations, on the win.
That’s a fine piece of writing, Justin. From sad inevitability, through dark vision, to redemption. The view of ‘the other side’ was especially well done though the details of the walk to the tower spoke of knowledge. Very believable and a great way to lead into the dark imaginings. Strong writing.
Excellent story all around. You get so locked up in the man and his climb, that when the action kicks in, you're caught off guard. Sort of corresponds to the image I had in my youth as to what happened to Suicides: they were sent to Hell!
Enjoyed that. Great pacing, and pathos.
Great story, thank you.
held my breath a couple times; which tells you how engaged I was reading this. applause
This was dark and it was deep. And scary in all its interpretations. Wow.
This was juicy, Justin. Well done!
I love this: "David walks gingerly down to the next platform. Pulls out his Sharpie and uncaps it. Writes MISSING STEP —> on the handrail in bold letters." Giving new purpose to the Sharpie at the end was brilliant.
Best of luck with your Lunar submission! Fingers crossed for you.
Great story Justin. Good luck on the submission.