This was very well written, Justin. I never felt like the story was drifting at all, and I think you chose the best path forward. There are only so many ways it could go, one or both of them dying, they get out using an escape plan instead of being given the choice, or they remain prisoners. The escape plan could have worked, but that almost guarantees a part four. I liked that you left some question as to their survival against the elements. Every part was well told -- definitely one of my favorite stories of yours.
I really enjoyed this, Justin. Definitely a cliff hanger!! Your imagery is perfect, as always, and the photograph to accompany your story is exactly right.
I love open endings. Sometimes, we let readers complete the story. And, I’m fine with that here. What an adventure! How about posting it on Scrib for crits?
I really enjoyed the story Justin. It kept my interest the whole way through. I did read the ending a couple of times though to see if I liked it. At first it seemed like a sudden ending but then I understood how you worked it. I'm not a professional so that is just my thoughts. But nice job, the story was great.
Jan 18, 2023·edited Jan 18, 2023Liked by Justin Deming
I don't know anything about this genre, Justin. The closest I have come would be the Trilogy of the Rings. But I DO know you have spun a hell of a tale here, kiddo! The open ending was inspired! Sharron
I was very curious to see where this story would end up, and I actually quite like that you left it open with the cliffhanger. Much like others have said, Gareth's motivations and story would be interesting to read.
Fantastic conclusion, Justin. The only question that hangs in my mind is why Gareth made the decision to stay. It made me wonder how his circumstances were different from Robbie and Cormac's when he stumbled upon this civilization. Was it really a better choice to stay than to return to his real life? If so... why??? If you were to turn this into a longer piece or a novella, there would be room for such indulgences. 😊But as it is, I enjoyed this three-part ride very much. Well done!
This was very well written, Justin. I never felt like the story was drifting at all, and I think you chose the best path forward. There are only so many ways it could go, one or both of them dying, they get out using an escape plan instead of being given the choice, or they remain prisoners. The escape plan could have worked, but that almost guarantees a part four. I liked that you left some question as to their survival against the elements. Every part was well told -- definitely one of my favorite stories of yours.
I enjoyed the three part story, you kept us all wanting more. I was hoping for a rescue in the end, but sometimes that isn’t real life, is it.
I really enjoyed this, Justin. Definitely a cliff hanger!! Your imagery is perfect, as always, and the photograph to accompany your story is exactly right.
What a great story!! I somehow missed reading it when you first put it out in Jan.Love reading your work so talented!!
I love open endings. Sometimes, we let readers complete the story. And, I’m fine with that here. What an adventure! How about posting it on Scrib for crits?
What a tremendous ending! Great story Justin! I love reading your longer work
Thoroughly enjoyed this!
I really enjoyed the story Justin. It kept my interest the whole way through. I did read the ending a couple of times though to see if I liked it. At first it seemed like a sudden ending but then I understood how you worked it. I'm not a professional so that is just my thoughts. But nice job, the story was great.
I don't know anything about this genre, Justin. The closest I have come would be the Trilogy of the Rings. But I DO know you have spun a hell of a tale here, kiddo! The open ending was inspired! Sharron
I was very curious to see where this story would end up, and I actually quite like that you left it open with the cliffhanger. Much like others have said, Gareth's motivations and story would be interesting to read.
Still a cliffhanger. Not disappointed.
Fantastic conclusion, Justin. The only question that hangs in my mind is why Gareth made the decision to stay. It made me wonder how his circumstances were different from Robbie and Cormac's when he stumbled upon this civilization. Was it really a better choice to stay than to return to his real life? If so... why??? If you were to turn this into a longer piece or a novella, there would be room for such indulgences. 😊But as it is, I enjoyed this three-part ride very much. Well done!
(Oops, Sharon I meant. Darn autocorrect!) Thanks again for reading!